Soft Smile, Green Thumb Caress


Photo Prompt from Bluebell Books

I’ve built a barrier with my hand
To keep all nasty things away
None have appeared on my diligent watch
And that’s the way that it should stay

I’ve told the sun that it must cease
To burn with its withering ray
No more heat to worry your fragile mind
Peace, sweet green peace today

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23 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Faze
    Jul 10, 2011 @ 04:37:48

    the joys of gardening is something I’m familiar with, so i can really relate to the feeling :)

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  2. Sajeevs blog
    Jul 10, 2011 @ 06:04:57

    Nice thoughts on how we should nurture our thoughts diligently like tender plants and keep straying thoughts at bay:)

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  3. bornstoryteller
    Jul 10, 2011 @ 08:38:22

    Sweet and to the point.

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  4. mindlovemisery
    Jul 10, 2011 @ 10:20:33

    Awww very sweet I love how you used the 3 words so seamlessly.

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    • wordcoaster
      Jul 10, 2011 @ 18:44:09

      Thanks! Sometimes these word prompts just seem to flow and form the perfect mold for the poem, while other times they stick out awkwardly. Glad you thought this was the former!

      Reply

  5. Jingle
    Jul 10, 2011 @ 12:45:32

    refreshing, well done.
    Thanks for linking and creating.
    :)

    Reply

  6. mish
    Jul 10, 2011 @ 17:04:27

    Very direct … and conveys a feeling of protectiveness over the plant !

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  7. Paula Tohline Calhoun
    Jul 10, 2011 @ 22:47:27

    This rings so true – the voice of a child who has been given an important job, and takes it seriously! Thanks for sharing a great poem with a different slant!

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    • wordcoaster
      Jul 10, 2011 @ 23:31:02

      I simply wrote what I saw–I’m kind of a literalist in that respect (which is why usually I pair a picture with a poem AFTER I’ve written the poem) Should I be more abstract next time?

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      • Paula Tohline Calhoun
        Jul 18, 2011 @ 12:37:06

        Just saw your reply to my comment. If your question was not rhetorical, the answer is not necessarily! Why would you go in one direction or another when your mind steers you where it will. Yes, I work on my poems, and often rewrite, cut, edit, rewrite, crumple up and start over, etc., but the poem and/or story seldom deviates from the original idea or style.

        Just go with the flow, is another way of putting it. Abstract poetry, metaphorical, surreal. I can enjoy reading them and write them all, (after a fashion!), but the way I write is always an effort at commenting on ponderings, telling a story, or simply responding to a prompt!

        I still love your poem!

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        • wordcoaster
          Jul 18, 2011 @ 12:58:19

          Thanks for the response–I’m not sure if the question was rhetorical or perhaps directed at myself :P I think poetry runs a fine line between the boring: here it is, DUH! And the theoretical intangible realm where words don’t seem to have a right to dwell. And then there’s the plague of angst that riddles much of what’s left. Wanted to make sure that this piece wasn’t a DUH piece. :) Thanks for your encouragement!

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  9. kez
    Jul 18, 2011 @ 16:15:56

    A lovely write if only things were protected as simply …thank you

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    • wordcoaster
      Jul 18, 2011 @ 16:28:18

      Too true, but that which we love we’re bound to protect with intensity sprung from source hard to detect; Hold onto my hand as we cross the street an instinct of danger spells instant retreat– our fingers intertwined a living basket weave, and nothing can force your mother to leave. :) Thank you for reading and commenting!

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  10. Jingle
    Jul 23, 2011 @ 23:02:05

    profound entry.

    How are you?

    Welcome join us for week 6 short story slam fun,

    Bless you..

    Keep it up!

    Reply

  11. Mike Patrick
    Jul 27, 2011 @ 19:02:32

    This was a great theme. You words gave it meaning. If you read it outloud, you can feel where the iambic verse kicks in and where you lose it. A little editing could make this a stand-out poem.

    Reply

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