Why do birds suddenly appear
Every time that I am here?
These oversized crows with their oversized voices
Prophesying many dark pre-chosen choices
Foreboding feelings flood my senses
Paranoia paralyzes me
Covenantal Crows
06 Oct 2011 37 Comments
in Poetry, Something Borrowed, Something New Tags: (They Long to Be) Close to You, Carpenters, Close to You
Oct 06, 2011 @ 03:48:01
very clever and enjoyable; only one thing : why did you not rhyme the last two lines when the rest of the poem rhymes? I’m not being critical, just curious.
Oct 06, 2011 @ 11:15:51
Thanks–I was trying to go for a stark ending (the paranoia stops the rhyme), but I probably should have had one more rhyming couplet before an orphaned line to set it off.
Oct 06, 2011 @ 07:34:57
I understand what you’re saying! I think we’ve been listening to the same news broadcast.
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/05/treasure/
Oct 06, 2011 @ 11:42:38
Haha I turned off the news long ago–probably should be more attuned to it, but… Loved your poem like a child likes finding a discarded penny (actually I still collect discarded pennies)
Oct 06, 2011 @ 07:53:11
I love the last stanza of ‘Treasure’: absolutely wonderful. it redeems the whole poem
Oct 06, 2011 @ 08:43:43
Very clever. I enjoyed reading this
Oct 06, 2011 @ 11:48:45
Thanks! Crows are clever birds. I took a video of a crow battling a McDonalds meal. Someone had left a crumpled bag in the parking garage and the crow thrwe it around until a little box fell out of it. Then it jumped on the box and pecked it until it finally opened. There was half a fry inside.
Oct 06, 2011 @ 11:27:55
a very unique write,,, beautifully worded
Oct 06, 2011 @ 11:49:41
Thank you so much!
Oct 06, 2011 @ 12:52:12
this is fun.
Oct 06, 2011 @ 12:57:11
Hmm… I did not expect that response, but I’m glad it was fun. Thanks
Oct 06, 2011 @ 21:31:15
The Carpenters never saw it coming… (:
Oct 06, 2011 @ 21:53:41
Thanks! I hope they wouldn’t mind–I love that song, but sometimes I take things I love and make them monstrous.
Oct 07, 2011 @ 05:17:57
Great write
Oct 07, 2011 @ 08:26:16
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it
Oct 07, 2011 @ 08:54:52
Cleverly written. Great stuff!
Here is my entry:
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/everyone.html
Oct 07, 2011 @ 09:12:20
Thanks! I loved your poem–a drunken villanelle
Oct 07, 2011 @ 09:17:53
Haunting bit of work, enjoyed the lead in, a line sung so sweetly given such a great twist. ~ Rose
Oct 07, 2011 @ 13:39:28
Thanks! I am a twisted person, so it comes naturally
Oct 07, 2011 @ 12:37:00
very clever write and well done like the way you presented this
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/05/today%e2%80%99s-feelings/
Oct 07, 2011 @ 13:45:39
Thanks so much, both for your comment and link
Oct 07, 2011 @ 16:53:34
That poem is just fun fun fun! Now I will have that song stuck in my head! Great job!
Oct 07, 2011 @ 17:43:53
Thanks!
If you’re going to have a song stuck in your head, it might as well be that one 
Oct 08, 2011 @ 04:09:36
Nice. I enjoyed this one
Oct 08, 2011 @ 13:19:17
Thanks! So glad you liked it
Oct 10, 2011 @ 22:33:56
Ah, I like poems with a mixture of rhymes and sudden endings. I really enjoyed this, I’ll be looking back in
Oct 10, 2011 @ 22:44:28
Thanks! I like to use a variety of styles so that the reader doesn’t know quite what to expect–that way I have the element of surprise
I hope you will check back around, there’s a good variety so perhaps you’ll find some gems among the garbage 
Oct 12, 2011 @ 17:22:06
Non-friendly birds.Interesting way to play with words. Good descriptive scene!
Oct 12, 2011 @ 23:29:59
Thanks! Nope, not friendly at all–big brash black bird-bullies.
Oct 12, 2011 @ 17:29:15
nature has its own ways and plans which must be accepted and understood, sometimes its difficult to accept crows.great poem
Oct 12, 2011 @ 23:30:44
Very true–those cantankerous crows are quite hard to get along with. Thanks!
Oct 13, 2011 @ 21:39:32
strong imagery, in my view
Oct 14, 2011 @ 01:29:18
Thanks! Some poems are like coffee, dark and strong–though I don’t drink coffee so I might be wrong
Oct 14, 2011 @ 18:57:10
Corvidae are much maligned, but reward attention.
Oct 15, 2011 @ 02:16:59
I love ravens and jays and even magpies, but I don’t like crows. They demand attention constantly and thus become a caricature. Perhaps it’s their all-too-human attributes that frighten me