To each his own and one beside to lay this heavy road,
–For what is trod is not denied but falls beneath the load
And evidence is naught but specks which pain upon the eye;
–This highway fraught with wrecks of bone demands its own supply,
While dogs that bark at rattled panes are tongue-lashed by their owners,
–But in the dark the freighting trains deliver all their orders.
So break a reed to simply prove these weak hands are the stronger
–And stake a claim in Eros’ love for patience can’t wait longer
As visions of bucolic life are swallowed up in war,
–Derisions from a nagging wife for skimping on a chore–
A paradigm shift that pleads its worth with massive aftershock
–The growing rift a subtle hint like ticking of the clock:
Our flame grows dim as wax runs down and seals upon the floor—
–Exiled memoirs, a tax of dreams: two cents and then no more.
So what is worse—to splurge away your money none the wiser,
–Or follow the more frugal urge as penny-pinching miser?
Which begs the question creeping in, unwanted and unbidden:
–Under the mattress of this bed what token dreams lay hidden?

Nov 11, 2011 @ 19:03:46
This is awesome David!!! Well crafted with excellent imagery. Great flow
Nov 11, 2011 @ 19:13:19
Thanks! I like how this one turned out
Nov 14, 2011 @ 10:09:15
I think “well-crafted,” as P&I said, is the perfect description for this piece. The biggest problem with heavily metered/structured poetry is when one line doesn’t quite fit, or when suddenly the word choice is contrived in order to MAKE it fit. But this one reads brilliantly!
Nov 14, 2011 @ 11:27:31
Thank you so much! I’ve written more than my fair share of contrived poems, so I’m glad you don’t think this is one of them!
Dec 02, 2011 @ 21:25:50
This highway fraught with wrecks of bone demands its own supply,
nice imagery, this has a wicked flow through out and your close made me smile…what dreams do we hide…i like…
Dec 03, 2011 @ 01:22:03
Thanks! So glad you enjoyed it–hope you have a wonderful future ahead of you
Dec 03, 2011 @ 05:08:29
love the rhymes and fast flow of this… a true wordcoaster-ride… great imagery..esp. like the flame and wax image
Dec 03, 2011 @ 11:05:26
Wonderful! So glad you took a ride. Flames and wax go together almost as well as turkey and Thanksgiving
Dec 03, 2011 @ 19:25:07
Very origonal imagery and metaphoric coinages. This was quite a ride through life. Well done.
Dec 03, 2011 @ 19:53:30
Thank you! Though not a “real” word, I like origonal–seems very geometric (and it’s original too)