For Whom the BELL Tolls

Lost in the crowd you seem
To be almost out of control;
The faces blur as in a dream
And your feet, like wheels, roll.

It’s jostle in and jostle out
As you board the metro train;
Everyone seems to scream and shout,
About what? The fight, the strain–
All those hustling bustling feet,
Pray to God you find a seat,

Else you’ll stand there in your slacks,
Hear the clicking clacking on the tracks,
Just relax…

“The shadows pass, the shadows pass, the shadows pass.”

Start to sway, your legs give way;
You start to fall, but that’s okay,
The car is packed, this very fact
Now turns into a good thing.

Your legs return, no one will learn
This truth; they’re none the wiser.
Reach the stop just before your own
And the crowds gush out like a geyser.

Suddenly you’re all alone
On the midnight train to nowhere;
You take a seat, and then repeat
A phrase, oh so familiar,

“For everyone else it’s jostle out
But I’m only Jocelin.”

Photo by John Somerville

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8 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. hedgewitch
    Dec 07, 2011 @ 17:16:19

    Interesting word play–great mimicking of the train sounds in ” the shadows pass” repetition–and some startling images.


    • wordcoaster
      Dec 07, 2011 @ 17:31:33

      Thanks! That one line I can’t take credit for–I found it in my hero Ray Bradbury’s story “After the Ball” and loved it for that very reason. πŸ™‚


  2. brian
    Dec 07, 2011 @ 20:58:32

    midnight train to no where…nice i like the jostle out and jocelin word play at the end…and i love ray bradbury too…smiles…


  3. Morning
    Dec 07, 2011 @ 21:47:10

    this is fun.

    great word play and lovely story.


  4. Charles - Chazzy (shralec)
    Dec 08, 2011 @ 19:14:32

    I didn’t expect the pun at the end! TouchΓ©. Sense of motion here works well.


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