Hurricane David


Jones Creek in a car
Thoughts all astir
I’ve crossed it, it’s over
Not much more than a blur
Idle chatter doesn’t matter
There’s no alligator
Six fools on their stools
No one brought any myrrh

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12 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. brian miller
    Dec 14, 2011 @ 23:14:19

    nice dance to your words…nice ref at the end…i know i am not catching it all but i appreciate the poem…

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    • wordcoaster
      Dec 14, 2011 @ 23:59:22

      Thanks! It’s kind of a nonsensical poem, written while I was taking a road trip back from Florida to Maryland and commentates on the interaction in the car 🙂

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  2. Jebbi
    Dec 15, 2011 @ 00:58:26

    The blur of Jone’s creek on a road trip…enjoyed this

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  3. claudia
    Dec 15, 2011 @ 01:16:20

    smiles..love the alligator and the myrrh…what a combination..and a road trip from florida to maryland sounds fantastic.. no wonder it inspired some poetry..

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    • wordcoaster
      Dec 15, 2011 @ 01:41:43

      Haha, yeah not quite two things you’d expect to find in the same poem. Road trips with my family are quite fantastic. I don’t write much poetry during them because we’re too busy taking turns being the dance leader or singing the Meow Mix song in a round or drawing hideous versions of Disney Princesses, etc. 🙂

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  4. C Rose
    Dec 15, 2011 @ 01:56:06

    the winds of our time of innocence, you captured the feel in a great way. wonderful write! ~ Rose

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  5. Kathy Bischoping
    Dec 15, 2011 @ 12:31:35

    When I got to “no one brought any myrrh” it felt like a poem about widely-believed myths, as if there weren’t frankincense & myrrh brought to Bethlehem, and there aren’t alligators in the sewers, and idle chatter DOES matter. And thus, that once we cross something, it’s is not over. Now I’m laughing at all this meaning I found in a nonsense-writing. This picture is great with it.

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  6. Morning
    Dec 18, 2011 @ 09:17:55

    beautiful.

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