Now You Know

As Eve was walking through creation
She struck up an innocent conversation
The conniving serpent, so seditious
Twisted God’s statements, made them fictitious
And said, “Taste this fruit, it’s so delicious.”

But at the core of his statement, at the root
He offered her much more than fruit
The serpent offered her divinity
Eve went off to share her glee
Adam accepted this gift so free

They both believed Satan’s dark lie
That they would not both surely die
Why shouldn’t they know as God doth know?
Why should He stay above, and them below?
In two bites they devoured the status quo

I hope the fruit at least tasted sweet
You gave up everything for that treat
No more intimate walks with God
Thorns and thistles grow where you sow sod
Immortality?Β  Noβ€”Firing squad!

From this garden whence they enjoyed perfection
Immediately they faced ejection
No more snacking from the tree of life
Fated to live with hardship and strife
Enmity between husband and wife

It’s something I’ve always subconsciously resented:
This tragedy might have been prevented
As they both fell prey to the serpent’s kiss
They should have but remembered this:
Ignorance is bliss


22 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. dswan2
    Jul 24, 2011 @ 16:47:23

    What a pleasant blog site! Easy on the eye and easy to read! And the poetry ain’t bad, either! Loved this one. My favorite line; “In two bites they devoured the status quo.”! The Bible condenses its narrative so much that we are left to wonder what else happened. Had to have been written by poets!!


    • wordcoaster
      Jul 24, 2011 @ 17:10:57

      Thank you so much! My biggest concern with the blog (other than the content itself, of course) is readability, so it’s very reassuring to know that it is readable πŸ™‚ That’s one of my favorite lines as well. Yes, the Genesis account is very poetic, so it lends itself well to adaptation. I think Milton would agree with me on that one πŸ˜‰


  2. Kim Nelson
    Aug 08, 2011 @ 15:13:14

    An interesting impression of mankind’s beginning. Your rhyme sceme is terrific.


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 08, 2011 @ 17:55:30

      Thank you! I laughed a little bit when I read “interesting” because sometimes I say that when i can’t think of anything positive to say πŸ˜› I enjoy taking on different rhyme schemes and this one seemed to match the flow pretty well πŸ™‚


  3. charlesmashburn
    Aug 08, 2011 @ 15:19:52

    Wonderfully done. I’ve never tried making poetry out of scripture. You do it well!


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 08, 2011 @ 17:58:39

      Thank you! You should try it some time–I think you’d be good at it. Some time soon hopefully I’ll post another Scripture-related poem. If you want I can let you know when that happens. This one was kind of my version of Paradise Lost–much less verbose than Milton’s. Oh well, it is what it is πŸ™‚


  4. mbwilliams
    Aug 08, 2011 @ 15:33:59

    Clever wordplay in this thoughtful poem. And a nice looking site btw πŸ™‚


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 08, 2011 @ 18:01:41

      Ooh thank you! Clever and thoughtful–quite a compliment and you threw in an extra cherry with your kind words about my blog! You, sir, know just how to make my day. πŸ˜€


  5. PhotoDiction
    Aug 08, 2011 @ 20:18:40

    A wonderful little rhyme and take on the woes man brings upon himself. πŸ™‚


  6. Jesse S. Mitchell
    Aug 08, 2011 @ 20:31:23

    had to be written by poets indeed.
    Now I do know…so powerful. Good work indeed.
    Jealous a little.
    Rock on.


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 08, 2011 @ 22:49:36

      Wow, thanks πŸ™‚ Compliments from you always mean so much because I truly admire the source–it’s nice to know that sometimes the jealousy runs both directions πŸ˜‰


  7. J Sirrah
    Aug 08, 2011 @ 23:42:06

    This based on a true story with a modern twist and powerful ending.
    Well done Sir,well done


  8. Jingle
    Aug 09, 2011 @ 13:07:03

    very fantastic imagery…



  9. The Noiseless Cuckooclock
    Aug 22, 2011 @ 15:19:29

    this is great.

    thanks for sharing.



  10. Irene
    Aug 23, 2011 @ 01:58:29

    Ignorance is bliss–I love the last statement! Wonderful read! πŸ™‚


  11. Morning
    Aug 23, 2011 @ 12:14:38

    some times, yes,ignorance is a bliss.

    well stated message, have fun in poetry picnic!


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