A True Story, Surely

Little girls on the monkey bars
Smiling coyly at the jungle gym
Where prisoner of playground wars
Small boy short and slim
With brilliant eyes stares back at them

Lighthouse signals blink of danger
‘One if by land, and two if by sea’
“Beach where death befalls the stranger”
Squint states existentially.
Eyes wide open make their plea:

Oh a simple taste of freedom
Lash-strung violins sing
Hit the bars to hear the hum
Music is a magical thing
Escape the cage on dragon’s wing

Past the land where the wild things are:
|Over coconut, banana, palm–
Over domesticated land of car–
Concrete safari, beggar lacking alm.|
Now smogless air shimmers from calm

“Come down from up there”
Two voices harmonize
Sound punctures vacant stare
Meaning returns to glazed eyes
Hero climbs down from the skies

Woodchips taste familiar to his feet
Mulch to protect flowering dreams
“Hello” and then “hello” repeat
A shuffling of the teams
Small boy noticeably beams


40 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. celinahokeah
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 00:57:23

    I love this poem…It reminds me of my childhood and the imagination that came with it..Its weird how we lose our imagination along the way.


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 04, 2011 @ 03:25:54

      Thank you! Yeah, maturity is definitely overrated, though it’s probably a good thing we DO fantasize less when we get older. I think the wisest adults still maintain their imaginative side underneath the shell of maturity 🙂


  2. scatteredpeicesofme
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 01:06:51

    I like the rhyming format you used. Very nice.


  3. charlesmashburn
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 06:33:52

    Wonderful poem! I am amazed at your ability to blend the prompt words into something so lovely and spontaneous as this work. I, as you will see, was immediately sent bounding off in a different direction.
    Nicely done!


  4. kez
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 08:45:42

    beautiful poem thank you


  5. Jeanie McBain
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 09:57:53

    Oh I love this poem well written well done 🙂


  6. Jingle
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 10:02:10

    you have wild and extraordinary imagination, what an exciting ride in your words.
    well done.



  7. mindlovemisery
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 10:24:46

    Beautiful and vivid reminds me of some events in my own childhood awesome rhyming scheme


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 04, 2011 @ 10:44:15

      Thanks! I think a lot of kids can probably relate at least in part to this situation. (I know I can, at least 😉 ) Hmm, perhaps I should try out this rhyme scheme more often.


  8. mish
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 16:42:40

    A lovely take on the prompt … and the picture at the end is … PRICELESS !!


  9. Guilie Castillo-Oriard
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 23:14:09

    This was lovely… Such poignancy in the way you evoke childish play, how imagination carries the mind, stops time, creates worlds apart. It’s a beautiful take on the prompt, and I’m glad I found your site!


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 04, 2011 @ 23:37:07

      Thank you! I’m glad you found it as well 🙂 Imagination is such a key ingredient in ‘most every child’s game and it really is a joy to watch the worlds being built straight out of someone’s brain. So glad I could share a small sliver of that with you!


  10. Kay Salady
    Aug 05, 2011 @ 12:13:18

    Up there in your special tree is a place I’d like to be where inspiration comes to mind away from people so unkind who never seem to understand the dreams that take us to the land of childhood. 🙂


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 05, 2011 @ 14:36:29

      Word. Haha, I just pictured someone rapping this and ending up with arms folded on “of childhood” But seriously thanks for reading and commenting 🙂


  11. terri0729
    Aug 05, 2011 @ 14:03:17

    Great take on the wordle! loved it. Blessings, Terri


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 05, 2011 @ 14:48:21

      Thanks Terri–imagination is such an invaluable thing and I think it’s such a shame that it’s eroding bit by bit in today’s society. Time to bring it back 🙂


  12. e.a.s. demers
    Aug 05, 2011 @ 21:47:11

    This was quite lovely! Wonderful take on the prompt 🙂


  13. Fountains
    Aug 06, 2011 @ 01:10:30

    The Where the Wild Things Are reference made my night!


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 06, 2011 @ 01:33:03

      Thanks–love that book! It’s probably the preeminent children’s fantasy book. I liked certain scenes from the movie, but hated how much angst the film held overall. It was quite a downer actually. 🙂


      • Fountains
        Aug 06, 2011 @ 01:40:51

        I agree wholeheartedly. And coming from an angsty sad sap like me, that’s saying something.


        • wordcoaster
          Aug 06, 2011 @ 02:11:40

          Angst is the last thing you want in a children’s movie. Next time I hear the words “Spike Jones” and “new remake of a children’s classic” in the same sentence I just might have to buy a gun.


  14. Fountains
    Aug 06, 2011 @ 03:56:36

    Right behind you! Send a warning shot over to Tim Burton, as well. Not thrilled with what he did to Alice.


    • wordcoaster
      Aug 06, 2011 @ 04:25:04

      That one I didn’t even see because it looked so terrible. Also I’ve never met a Tim Burton film I’ve liked yet. Don’t know what Helena sees in him. 😉


  15. bornstoryteller
    Aug 06, 2011 @ 07:15:35

    Twitted and stumbled and liked and shared. Nice one.


  16. bendedspoon
    Aug 06, 2011 @ 08:40:34

    remarkable poem! I love how you use the word prompts and the smile in the end is truly sweet 🙂


  17. pure2core
    Aug 07, 2011 @ 01:32:37

    So much of talent. very nicely interwoven words.Thanks for share.


  18. TheMsLvh
    Aug 12, 2011 @ 21:38:46

    This poem made me feel like I was on the playground again. This was wonderful:
    Sound punctures vacant stare
    Meaning returns to glazed eyes
    Hero climbs down from the skies

    Very touching and meaningful poem. Well done!


  19. ogungbesan20
    Sep 06, 2011 @ 15:55:14



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