Loose Change


I turned over a new leaf
Which was attached to a branch
Linked to a trunk
Rooted in the ground
The cold dark earth
The warm light earth
Where used to reside the roots
Linked to a trunk
Attached to a branch
That held a leaf
Which turned me under

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25 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Abby Kelly
    Aug 27, 2011 @ 19:02:41

    I love the repetition and circular thought. Good job! http://www.benjity.wordpress.com

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    • wordcoaster
      Aug 27, 2011 @ 20:23:21

      Thanks! I tend to have circular thoughts because I’m a well-rounded person. 😛 Unfortunately I don’t have the time to fully explore your link right now, but I will 🙂

      Reply

  2. brian
    Nov 20, 2011 @ 18:39:42

    ha…def nice circular…a leaf turned you under? smiles…guess that can happen with change…fun read…

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  3. Shawna
    Nov 20, 2011 @ 20:12:41

    Oh man, you just rocked my world. 🙂 I love “which turned me under.” Nice!

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  4. Heaven
    Nov 20, 2011 @ 21:43:00

    Nice play of words, with touches of nature ~

    Lovely share ~

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  5. kaykuala
    Nov 20, 2011 @ 22:04:20

    Great circular way of treatment given.

    Hank

    Reply

  6. Sheila Moore
    Nov 21, 2011 @ 01:39:57

    oh, nicely done. love the swing around effect!

    Reply

  7. The Cello Strings
    Nov 21, 2011 @ 09:18:03

    very special and beautiful change under a leaf.

    Reply

  8. Lynnaima
    Nov 27, 2011 @ 22:20:11

    enjoyable, nice flip from root to tips, and back and forth 🙂
    enjoy gooseberry day!!!
    my entry: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/11/24/your-asogwe/

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  9. Lynnaima
    Nov 27, 2011 @ 22:21:09

    enjoyable read, love how you started from root to tip and then made it tip to root, real cool!
    my gooseberry entry: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/11/24/your-asogwe/

    Reply

  10. Hema
    Nov 28, 2011 @ 08:16:15

    Thats a good one. Like the way you have brought it around 🙂

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  11. Marbles in My Pocket
    Nov 28, 2011 @ 11:25:52

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  12. irenethebean
    Nov 28, 2011 @ 13:37:04

    the only metaphor worth it’s meaning
    love it

    irenethebean.worpress.com

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  13. lukewater
    Nov 29, 2011 @ 00:29:09

    Love it, it’s adorable 😀
    Don’t read my poetry it’s depressing next to yours xD

    lukewater

    Reply

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