Superman’s Regret


X-ray vision like a dart
Through your boots of Spanish leather
Everything’s coming together
Everything’s falling apart
Tired of seeing the heart
A skeleton-like feather

Tired of seeing what’s in your head
Rather than your face
A bony shroud of lace
Where others see cheeks of red
Covering of the dead
Black and white embrace

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22 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Morning
    Nov 07, 2011 @ 12:22:02

    black and white embrace,

    cool ending, powerful emotions, in colorful words.

    well done.

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  2. Life: Between the lines
    Nov 07, 2011 @ 17:20:49

    I liked the rhyming 🙂 it was interesting!
    enjoy gooseberry day!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/11/05/reality/

    Reply

  3. tinkwelborn
    Nov 07, 2011 @ 21:53:31

    yes, irony here.
    makes me glad I don’t have x-ray vision.
    Yeah, what did he see in Lois Lane?

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  4. David King
    Nov 08, 2011 @ 07:43:26

    Remarkable effect these words have. I’ve not quite worked out how or why. The ending is superb.

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    • wordcoaster
      Nov 08, 2011 @ 10:14:02

      Thank you so much! So glad whatever combination of factors were present here, combined to make this an enjoyable and affecting piece. You made my day 😀

      Reply

  5. The Noiseless Cuckooclock
    Nov 08, 2011 @ 14:44:43

    very sneaky and beautiful piece.

    glad to read you.

    🙂

    Reply

  6. Poets Rally
    Nov 10, 2011 @ 14:20:53

    X-ray vision like a dart
    Through your boots of Spanish leather

    love these lines with very carefully chosen words, wow.

    Reply

  7. brian miller
    Dec 03, 2011 @ 22:38:36

    once you break down life to that level, yeah i would rather see a bit of the flesh…smiles…nice flow to your words…and agree on them being well chosen…

    Reply

  8. claudia
    Dec 04, 2011 @ 05:07:20

    yep…probably not really desirable to have x-ray vision… love the mention of spanish leather boots…and great flow

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  9. caty
    Dec 04, 2011 @ 23:11:37

    I think it would get frustrating having xray vision…I bet it was a regret of Superman’s. Enjoyed the flow and rhyming in this 🙂

    Reply

  10. Janaki Nagaraj
    Feb 11, 2012 @ 13:14:45

    Strong words…x-ray vision? I am not game for that. Lovely write.

    Reply

  11. elizena
    Feb 22, 2012 @ 22:26:24

    I have to agree with Morning, this was extremely powerful and vivid! This part in particular was kind of me…:

    Everything’s coming together,
    Everything’s falling apart,

    …however I added, “Finally glued together with powerful, soul strengthening love. It can never fall apart.”
    You did a wonderful job of capturing the imagination. Well done. Blessings.

    http://elizena-lovingmycreator.blogspot.com/2012/02/soul-song.html

    Reply

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