Devilish Diner

‘So what, we’re liars?
I said it—the truth’

Gobble those words with forked tongues
Sword swallow, regurgitate
Spoon-feed it to the masses:

‘i’, desire wrath—
IS trust what I loathe?’

6 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Julie Proudfoot
    Nov 05, 2011 @ 18:05:00

    Great image, engaging words, grabs you, love it. 🙂


  2. Poetry & Icecream
    Nov 05, 2011 @ 19:13:56

    An interesting write 🙂


  3. elenafacchinei
    Mar 12, 2012 @ 22:14:39

    Your poem here is mysterious yet deeply meaningful. The reader can feel the urgency of your message, which is great-grand, but you deliver with a childish example. This I believe emphasizes the truth found in innocence and the corruption that comes with the symbiotic relationship between desire and the feeling that comes with “loathe”-ing something… The lack of lines here compared to your other poems make me infer that your subject here was of much more importance and is therefore heavier- to be taken in with short, quick hits… am I correct?


    • wordcoaster
      Mar 12, 2012 @ 22:28:20

      I like your in-depth analysis a lot! I do tend to be more abrupt on deeper subjects, usually preferring a swift dive to the depths rather than a slow descent. I also decided to employ the anagram to create a swirling sort of symmetry in the poem, a balancing act of truth and lies. Thank you so much for taking the time to really weigh my poems carefully–I appreciate that very much 😀


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