Poetry on adrenaline
08 Apr 2012 12 Comments
in Haiku/Senryu/17 Syllables, Poetry, Word Prompt
Tags: forgive, play, Poetry
Thoughts play nasty tricks;
Time bends like weeping willow:
Forgive my false mind.
Previous Assent Next Dream Getaway
Apr 08, 2012 @ 15:15:55
I forgive your false mind
Apr 08, 2012 @ 15:21:42
Thank you! I missed the prompt at haiku heights somehow–time just passed me by!
Apr 08, 2012 @ 18:09:34
Beautiful simile in the second line preparing for the final confession! Delightful!
Apr 08, 2012 @ 19:54:30
Thank you so much! I’ve been enjoying your beautiful haiku as well
Poetry & Icecream
Apr 08, 2012 @ 21:09:46
Excellent senryu! Love the simile
Apr 09, 2012 @ 01:14:25
Thanks P&I! It’s so good to hear from you!
Apr 08, 2012 @ 21:32:21
Thoughts can indeed be deceitful. Gotta watch out for ’em!
The Christ Child at Play
Apr 09, 2012 @ 01:24:08
Quite true! Very interesting take with your haiku
Apr 08, 2012 @ 22:59:08
Good job … This is my Day 8 ~~ Waiting Their Turn.
Apr 09, 2012 @ 01:25:08
Thanks becca, always enjoy your haiku!
Apr 20, 2012 @ 00:47:44
I love the second line here a lot.. and somehow cannot stand false minds..
Apr 20, 2012 @ 02:28:24
Thanks! I can’t stand false minds either, especially when the false mind is MINE.
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