I Can’t Remember the Joke

Not even the punchline

I miss you terribly for no reason today,
I stubbed my toe on your memory–
Not even a full scene,
Just your smiling eyes flickering
With laughter.

For: dversepoets.com


17 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. brian miller
    Dec 01, 2012 @ 18:42:25

    I stubbed my toe on your memory…dang what a great way to put that…and not even a full memory but…very cool short…


  2. AJ Walker (@ajwalker65)
    Dec 01, 2012 @ 20:25:43

    This was great. Brief but that one image of “stubbing a toe” on a memory! Excellent. The entire poem resonates beautifully.


  3. poemsofhateandhope
    Dec 01, 2012 @ 20:48:11

    I think this poem says a lot with great economy of words. Stubbing a toe on a memory – a short sharp shock….maybe the discovery of something, or a reminder, and the laughter – the flickering eyes, to me, shows affection ( although I guess it’s how u choose to read into this).. The affection then makes this very personal. Great poem IMO – thanks for stopping by and sharing


  4. Polly Robinson
    Dec 02, 2012 @ 03:42:30

    I love the brevity and the wonderful line ‘I stubbed my toe on your memory–’
    Dash it, I wish I’d come up with that!


    • wordcoaster
      Dec 03, 2012 @ 00:49:41

      Thank you–I almost didn’t know what to do with the rest of the poem after that line, but I couldn’t seem to have it fit quite right as a closing line, either. Oh well πŸ™‚


  5. LΓ‘zaro Rojas
    Dec 02, 2012 @ 03:44:42

    It’s a love/hate relationship stubbing one’s toe on a memory. πŸ™‚


  6. David King
    Dec 02, 2012 @ 07:12:29

    I stubbed my toe on your memory–

    Totally superb! Love this line.


    • wordcoaster
      Dec 03, 2012 @ 00:59:07

      Thank you so much! I loved your poem of revisiting a place that holds special memories without the person you shared those memories with. The emptiness is palpable πŸ™‚


  7. Meenakshi
    Dec 02, 2012 @ 23:59:48

    intense, deep memories, what a way to put it!


  8. Hannah Gosselin
    Dec 11, 2012 @ 19:40:23

    Cool. A unique way of stating this. I just love the flickering image of her eyes smiling…intense.


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