Ethereal Dementia

The Blind Lion Roars

Leave turgid ways
Behind like fresh footprints
Zig-zagging haphazard sand maze
At beach bottleneck when miscreant brays,
“There’s a shark in the water, everyone run!”–then
Tear down your burlap Berlin wall replays,
Light the bright demarcation blaze,
Enter effervescence:
Perspective sways–
Lather, rinse,



25 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Sherry Marr
    Dec 28, 2012 @ 21:08:14

    Politics these days sounds like the White Rabbit’s tea party – this is a very clever piece, from such varied words. Well done!


  2. Kim Nelson
    Dec 28, 2012 @ 21:10:41

    You did a great job including words and creating form. Nice work!


  3. Karen
    Dec 28, 2012 @ 22:20:56

    I love the form (and the sense of it, too).


    • wordcoaster
      Dec 29, 2012 @ 03:13:10

      Thanks! I’m trying to get better at unfamiliar forms–I enjoy the diatelle because it has such an order to it; everything is neatly mirrored and in its place. I’m glad it makes sense, haphazard as it is 🙂


  4. Mama Zen
    Dec 28, 2012 @ 22:22:00

    Love that closing!


  5. Grace
    Dec 28, 2012 @ 22:33:04

    Good work on weaving all the words…ah…zen ~ Smiles ~


  6. Laurie Kolp
    Dec 28, 2012 @ 22:56:10

    Ethereal dementia, indeed… love it!


    • wordcoaster
      Dec 29, 2012 @ 03:26:03

      Thank you! I was lamenting the fact that I couldn’t fit those last two words into the poem, when it dawned on me that they formed the perfect title 🙂


  7. Hannah Gosselin
    Dec 28, 2012 @ 23:03:38

    I’m in agreement with the Mama Zen!! Love that closing! Excellent write all together.


  8. Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly)
    Dec 29, 2012 @ 05:09:36

    Politics…a bowl full of nonsense…Great write!!


  9. Kerry O'Connor
    Dec 29, 2012 @ 12:14:54

    Ooh! I love the shark in the water in your middle line! The list words all work very well to create the drama of this piece.
    Thank you for participating on Real Toads.


  10. Kay Davies
    Dec 29, 2012 @ 16:46:30

    Fabulous. I loved “lather, rinse”!!
    Good work!


  11. afsarnizam
    Jan 02, 2013 @ 04:06:47

    nice poem


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